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February 25, 2005
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What if Adam just plain lied
     And  Eve
        with apple juice
           Running down her chin

Just     let    it    slide

Is the whole story  a hoax

A different mother
                    than Mary
                        No father
                             Holy Ghost

Was Lilith really all that bad

             She  just wanted to be free

                  The desert is hard on Mustangs
                              And her man was not handy

Was Mary really a virgin

          did Joseph just herd the sheep

Did Mary feel passion
            her body eternally saved
                  from damnation fire

As God swept her off her feet

the writers got it  wrong
fumbling the interception

Immaculate deception

going to burn in hell
             because  I  swear
                           love the universe as a she
not  believing
        I  grow  from A rib seedling
                    half as good as he


I have loved the boys
And maybe one girl

Will  the devil make me an appetizer
            at his red

Will I be spat back
          for being only mediocre evil
                    By the carnivorous  beast
If I worked
          and loved
               and tried to do good each day

Is my journey truly paved to hell
               With the my heart leading the way

If I gave
and prayed to the sky
          for more mercy in me
                 than pain I received
Would God just roll his eyes

And the devil be relieved
This is not a poem about not having faith, it's a poem about wondering. Mostly inspired by the rather unfriendly um, "organized" religous church accross the street from me. I know they conspire to see if there is something in our town laws to hang me as a witch....I have a few friends in my one cow town that would cut me down, if I really could not fly after all.

If you are not familiar with Lilith, look it up.....(Adams first wife....before she ran away).

The painting is one I did of Lilith, the copy is a bit "BrIGHT" to post in my painting gallery so I am going to send her with this poem for now.
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Given 2005-08-27
Lilith makes me wonder by *athenaRules is a rather aerie little poem which demands answers to some very heavy questions. ( Suggested by demonlight and Featured by ndifference )
AbbysMomma Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
This is beautifully wonderful. I too have had wondering thoughts on Lilith. Personally, I do not feel she is a demon. She's a woman who refused to submit, who had sex for pleasure, and got her children taken away from her. I'd seek revenge, too.
HELL-FIRE-SISTER-GUN Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2013
A poem about wander. i enjoyed reading it. its nice to see that there are others wondering the samething. i realy dont have faith in god. considering the frist text of religin and faith have been past about so many times that theres very little left of the original text. your poem continues to make me wonder is every thing that the religions teach is all that its cracked up to be.
love the poem by the way.
PoetryToTheMasses Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2011
Just a note to let you know that this work was featured as part of our latest weekly feature after it was suggested by *ClearSound.

P2TM is designed to encourage more people to read and write poetry, including song lyrics, through a weekly feature: one main poem, with information about the poem and the poet, and links to two further poems. All these poems are suggested to me by deviants.

Please visit the page and support P2TM by watching, suggesting poems and lyrics, donating and/or spreading the word.

Keep writing!
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oracle-of-nonsense Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2010  Student Writer
I have to say, I've definitely wondered the same things...Particularly about Lilith and Mary.
MistressMina123 Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2010
This was awesome, just the kind of work to question why she was hid from history.
Kasami-Kat Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2010
This is very pretty, very breathtaking.
ENvatTEdbrains Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2010
i love it!
wallflowerbaby13 Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2010
i have got to say i thoroughly enjoyed your poem about Lilith, whom i am just starting to learn about. it's funny. i remember learning somewhat in high school literature about adam and eve and even gilgamesh, but not about Lilith. in fact, the first time i heard about her was in a Syfy movie. and i just stumbled upon her again just recently. anyway, back to your poem. i can really connect to what you are saying, for i am not a member of any faith or religion, i like to say i'm agnostic. for there is just so much religion, that i'd rather just stay out of it. but this poem really does make me think. even if there was once a sacred text from a higher being, the translations that have been handed down through generations and made into how many languages, i bet there wouldn't be anything left of the original. So thank you for your original and thought provoking poem. i know now that i definitely want to learn more about Lilith.
lyingskin Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2010
I really, really liked this. The rythm of it, the very clear beat. I love how you have brought all the Biblical names to life - made them more than just a worthy mention in this book that so many people put so much faith in (myself included).

If I should make one small correction, there's a typo that confuses me a bit. "With the my heart leading the way" - isn't "the" redundant? Or "my"? Either of them, at least. As I read the sentence.

Any way. Really good job. Going to my favourites.
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