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What if Adam just plain lied
     And  Eve
        with apple juice
           Running down her chin

Just     let    it    slide

Is the whole story  a hoax

A different mother
                    than Mary
                        No father
                           Son
                             Holy Ghost

Was Lilith really all that bad

             She  just wanted to be free

                  The desert is hard on Mustangs
                              And her man was not handy

Was Mary really a virgin

          did Joseph just herd the sheep

Did Mary feel passion
         desire
            her body eternally saved
                  from damnation fire

As God swept her off her feet

the writers got it  wrong
          
fumbling the interception

Immaculate deception

going to burn in hell
             because  I  swear
                                dance
                           love the universe as a she
not  believing
        I  grow  from A rib seedling
                    half as good as he

dammed

I have loved the boys
    
And maybe one girl

Will  the devil make me an appetizer
            at his red
                  red
                     feast
OR

Will I be spat back
          for being only mediocre evil
                    By the carnivorous  beast
If I worked
          and loved
               and tried to do good each day

Is my journey truly paved to hell
               With the my heart leading the way

If I gave
and prayed to the sky
          for more mercy in me
                 than pain I received
   
Would God just roll his eyes

And the devil be relieved
        
This is not a poem about not having faith, it's a poem about wondering. Mostly inspired by the rather unfriendly um, "organized" religous church accross the street from me. I know they conspire to see if there is something in our town laws to hang me as a witch....I have a few friends in my one cow town that would cut me down, if I really could not fly after all.

If you are not familiar with Lilith, look it up.....(Adams first wife....before she ran away).



The painting is one I did of Lilith, the copy is a bit "BrIGHT" to post in my painting gallery so I am going to send her with this poem for now.
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Given 2005-08-27
Lilith makes me wonder by *athenaRules is a rather aerie little poem which demands answers to some very heavy questions. ( Suggested by demonlight and Featured by ndifference )
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AbbysMomma Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
This is beautifully wonderful. I too have had wondering thoughts on Lilith. Personally, I do not feel she is a demon. She's a woman who refused to submit, who had sex for pleasure, and got her children taken away from her. I'd seek revenge, too.
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HELL-FIRE-SISTER-GUN Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2013
A poem about wander. i enjoyed reading it. its nice to see that there are others wondering the samething. i realy dont have faith in god. considering the frist text of religin and faith have been past about so many times that theres very little left of the original text. your poem continues to make me wonder is every thing that the religions teach is all that its cracked up to be.
love the poem by the way.
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PoetryToTheMasses Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2011
Just a note to let you know that this work was featured as part of our latest weekly feature after it was suggested by *ClearSound.

P2TM is designed to encourage more people to read and write poetry, including song lyrics, through a weekly feature: one main poem, with information about the poem and the poet, and links to two further poems. All these poems are suggested to me by deviants.

Please visit the page and support P2TM by watching, suggesting poems and lyrics, donating and/or spreading the word.

Keep writing!
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OrganicFantasy Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2010
WIN.
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oracle-of-nonsense Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2010  Student Writer
I have to say, I've definitely wondered the same things...Particularly about Lilith and Mary.
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MistressMina123 Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2010
This was awesome, just the kind of work to question why she was hid from history.
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Kasami-Kat Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2010
This is very pretty, very breathtaking.
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ENvatTEdbrains Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2010
i love it!
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wallflowerbaby13 Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2010
i have got to say i thoroughly enjoyed your poem about Lilith, whom i am just starting to learn about. it's funny. i remember learning somewhat in high school literature about adam and eve and even gilgamesh, but not about Lilith. in fact, the first time i heard about her was in a Syfy movie. and i just stumbled upon her again just recently. anyway, back to your poem. i can really connect to what you are saying, for i am not a member of any faith or religion, i like to say i'm agnostic. for there is just so much religion, that i'd rather just stay out of it. but this poem really does make me think. even if there was once a sacred text from a higher being, the translations that have been handed down through generations and made into how many languages, i bet there wouldn't be anything left of the original. So thank you for your original and thought provoking poem. i know now that i definitely want to learn more about Lilith.
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lyingskin Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2010
I really, really liked this. The rythm of it, the very clear beat. I love how you have brought all the Biblical names to life - made them more than just a worthy mention in this book that so many people put so much faith in (myself included).

If I should make one small correction, there's a typo that confuses me a bit. "With the my heart leading the way" - isn't "the" redundant? Or "my"? Either of them, at least. As I read the sentence.

Any way. Really good job. Going to my favourites.
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KatsumiBatei Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Lilith, oh i remember I was watching something on History channel and they were telling the story. I saw it and had an eye roll moment, "so that's whats they don't wanna tell us, tsk"

About your poem, almost everything I've contemplated for a long part of my life. I finally decided to officially "stop" begin catholic near the end of my freshman year of high school, about 2 years ago, and after looking in to Wicca and Paganism, a year ago moved to the pagan path I now proudly but still very much newly walk with much to learn. Lets just say my mom found one of my books and flipped out but still I won't stop believing what I believe and I flat out told her I was not doing confirmation so it was a waste of my time going to the classes and spending the money for stuff but she still made me go and she said I only had to go for a few month and not do the whole thing... my post is getting long so I'm gonna stop before I rant any more.
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Kuragarikokoro Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2010  Student Writer
:clap: i really don't know what to say. but it's brilliant. not just the subject, but the flow, the structure. beautiful.
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MBryn Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2010  Student Writer
The part where the apple juice runs down Eve's chin stood out to me in particular. Overall, I love the poem.

The painting is quite nice, too. :D
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rebel-brat Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
i loved the rhyme scheme. the whole wondering thing too... yea. i totally get it.
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Ailvayn Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
I have wondered this so many times myself. Glad to see it written down so beautifully. :+fav:
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I agree and enjoy your piece of work!!!!!!! Fav!
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TheAnimeButterfly Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2009  Student Writer
Wow... This is very thought provoking. :nod:
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fly-high-butterfly14 Featured By Owner May 8, 2009   Writer
You're simply expressing questioning emotions, I think its completely natural. Every religion devoted to God is just the same as any other, except each has its own preferences of what it chooses to follow. Kind of stupid right?
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FaithNova Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2009
Honestly, I think your poem is more about faith, than anything I have ever heard inside a church.
And as it has been said:
See you in hell.
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hogret Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2009
Great poem! Have you seen John Cillier's gorgeous painting of Lilith? [link]
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Shadow-Messenger Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2009
Actually, makes you wonder what if God is all that the Church says he is...See Dogma and see if you don't think about it a little after you see Bartleby playing Lucifer a little...

Maybe God isn't all forgiving and good guy. Maybe he just made mankind to prove he could! Maybe he let us all down...

Whetever you are hindu, buddhist, christian, etc...Just have this in mind: We're alone. No one is coming to help we. Not God, Buddha, Zeus or any god!

Just look at what belief did to mankind. Just read a little about history of christianism and you will see! the Crusades, Terrorism, The Divine Comedy!

Damnit! They even said that children who die before they are batized go to hell! That's just plain sick and unfair!

Lilith is aniother prove of it! Do youy know why she was sent to hell by god?! Because she wanted to be equal to Adam! Is that so wrong?!?!

He send His own son to die in crucified, and for what?!?! To prove something?! To make his own son a martyr so people would believe him?!

Films like Carrie, The Others, Dogma, The Mist, Silent Hill and Bram Stocker Dracula makes you wonder what gentle god can he be! He creates a believe for himself and still lets people die and kill for HIM?! He lets people use His Fucking Name to Hurt other people and make their own rules and believes that suit them the best?!?!
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xscarcrowx Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2009
I stumbled across this. *very* well done.
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FunkyLilith Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2009
Also: my take on the whole Lucifer/Lilith thing... [link]
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FunkyLilith Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2009
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Sub-Messiah Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2009
This is delicious, mischievous and delightful. God can not realize he resides in Woman. Hence his sin.
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PoeticRefuge Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I really liked this! I was kind of just browsing poetry and a lot of what I happened to come across was very emo and cliche, but when I stumbled across this, I realized my browsing was not a lost cause. :) I like the pondering, I can definitely relate. The bible doesn't really add up does it? I quite like having knowledge, and its hard to imagine knowledge being a bad thing. How can you really know good if you don't have evil to compare it to? Good poem though, a job well done.
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Hyalma Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Magnificent.
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samitheghost Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2008
You must have heard this a thouusands times over, but congratz ond the DD.

I usually do think about that kind of thing, even though i'm christian. This poem made me think about it in another light. Thank you for being brave enough to post this.
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Tsukichi-chan Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2008
i'm releaved that I am not the only one who feels that way about Lilith. She wished for equality to Adam. He refused. She left. It is as simple as that. Does the fact that she wished to be her husbands equal make her evil? There is a rumer that most people [meaning the men who wrote and preach from the Bible] protray Lilith as an evil being because they beleive that woman really are lesser than men. But I beleive that she was one of the first humans to ever fully grasp the reality of life. That all humans are born equal, no matter their race or sex.
I hope I'm not being to philisophical... ^-^'
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Nekkyo Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2008  Student General Artist
Beautiful peom
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" I feel like a wolf in the middle of a herd of sheep and they're walking off a cliff"
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jonaswretch Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2008
"Blessed are they, the children of Lilith, that they may comfort themselves with laughter whilst standing on the very edge of ruin, for it is given unto them that they be not blind, but born seeing, thus shedding more tears than all others."

I've heard it told that Lilith didn't run away, but was spirited out of the garden by Lucifer on God's orders so as to calm things down with old Adam. Then he went back later, with God's blessing, and pulled the apple stunt with Eve to even things up.
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NeonGenesisEVARei Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2008
wow when i saw that a piece of writing was the most popular deviation when searched up lilith, i KNEW it had to be good [since unfortunately, many people don't bother to read>_>;]
but wow, this is such an amazing piece. i would 'favourite' it 20 Xs if i could. =]

WELL DONE.
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aestheticirony Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2008  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
It's a lovely poem.
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eclipz04 Featured By Owner May 16, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
I stumbled across this while doing a search for Lilith. As she's... important to me.

I like a lot in this poem. I don't think it's perfect, and some lines I find distracting, but many of the lines are powerful.

"not believing
I grow from A rib seedling
half as good as he"

"If I gave
and prayed to the sky
for more mercy in me
than pain I received

Would God just roll his eyes

And the devil be relieved"

Really powerful stuff and it was pieced together beautifully. I think at some points you're too straightforward, and that's what detracted me. But I overall loved it.

And that's a habitual constructive critique, so ignore it if you don't care XD
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Spiderweaver Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2008
I cannot possibly tell you how much I love this poem and how much it means to me.
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lilith92 Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2008   Photographer
This is beautiful and wonderful, and I am glad to know I'm not the only one who wonders :)
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Saint-Abigail Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2008
I will start by admitting this one key fact: I HATE Poetry with a fervor unmatched by any fellow thespian I have yet to meet! And yet, what you have written is an imaginative, colorful portrait with words I have yet to see matched. Well done!
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Jun107 Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2008
WOW.
just... WOW.
I loved it. I really did.
And I really love Lilith >_<"
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beastgirlshay Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2008
Really brilliant. Seems something like I would write. :) *fave*
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Setsune-Hoshiko Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2008
It's well written, and the style of placement it was put in makes you actually have to read the poem to get it.
Putting critique and things like that aside, I agree with you.
Not much more to say that others haven't already said. :+favlove:
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athenaRules Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2008
Thank you.
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Setsune-Hoshiko Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2008
You are very welcome. :)
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OliviaSFA Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2007   Writer
You should've mentioned Lots wife when she looked back at Sodom and got turned into ash and salt.

Women are almost always thought of as pretty much stupid and deceitful in the bible.

At least I think so.
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athenaRules Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2007
I agree, Lots wife needs a voice, will need to let that one stew for a bit. And yes, the holy words screwed the chicks and I don't mean the poultry type. Be well.
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allofmyconfusion Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2007   Writer
Im not a religious person but this was interesting to read. It did make me wonder. Excellent work.
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athenaRules Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2007
Thanks. I am not religious in the, ah, biblical sense, but mystified by the concept, not always in the glorious way. Be well.
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teknopathetique Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2007
when i read this poem a year ago on a different account i was blown away by the powerful wording.

a year later it still strikes me as powerful. definitely one of my favourite poems.
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athenaRules Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2007
Thank you. Glad it has staying power. :)
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Cmac13 Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2007   General Artist
i've always wondered why, we humans, when doing our own wondering harken BACK to the time of a smaller brained example of the current species, especially when religion holds such violence for those with even a tiny bit different :confused:
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Rafdog Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2007
its a lovely poem, but im even more impressed with how you have structured it, i would love to experiment with structure myself but havent found a place where it would be relevent.
good work
r
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